amazing. this felt like a deep medaphor. ^^ also like a pep-talk to armies for war or something. it was very inspirational. I can see how this would apply to more than just fighting. very good work ^^

I only found one error... i think..."but every that works will be repaid." should that be everyone?

write on!!

seemed more like a speech than a poem or essay, as you said. nonetheless, premium work here.