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| ice flyer 2006-08-27 ch 1,  | abuseThis was a good short story. The names were really good, and the first paragraph especially was some great description. I did feel like there should be some more or something...like, maybe, more of a plot (even though it's a short story, I wasn't sure what the final message of the story was.) I can see this as a beginning to a longer story, even. Good job :) |
| For What Its Worth 2006-02-08 ch 1, | abusethe name code seems to bepopular with you. lol. does he really die? and why would a pribce be so far away from help? i would suggest you keep only a few on fictionpress until you finish them, but that would deprive us of some serious wondering, now wouldn't it? lol. moving on to your next story... |