this is good

Nice story, like you said, it does need to be spell checked. ^^ Anyhow, I like the way Max creeped into her room, it was cute. Their conversation was also light and entertaining... Thx for reviewing my stuff!

- Signed as J.

sweet I like how you started out and finish that was really cool

im liking it.. put up more.. id like to see where this goes..

Hey! This is good. Diffrent, but good. Your tense slip in an out, but its good.