Well...i like it and i don't care what anyone else says! it's scarcastic and ironic at the same time, and it's chock full of mockery and sweetness. it's perfect

i like it. but, it's a bit repetative. not ur best

Andy: I'd interpret that as hopeful. Good job.

good, good, good. I think a ray of light tries to shine through.

OH! I LOVE IT! Its soo cute and beautiful! _ I love the last verse so Im glad you expanded it! _ And it had to do with problems that go on in the world and being unselfish! Wonderful stuff and idea for it! _ You're really great with poetry! _

I like it.. It seems half hopeful half sad, but it works which is a good thing. Carry on writing. - Kat

Hmmm... sounds like WWII. ). -CM

Whoa, a bit morbid. I dunno, I'm not putting you down, but the whole tone of the poem is a bit depressing, and then you inject that line about love. I think it needs one more "paragraph" as a conclusion, maybe. Just my opinion.