 Alankria 2006-01-24 . chapter 1Very very nice. I noticed one error in the final sentence: 'the Virus that has cause so much trouble for her company.' Should be 'caused'. Other than that... wow. What a wonderful rendering of the internet, excellently written (I really could imagine what I read). I'm not sure if I'd like to see a story in that setting, or if that would somehow ruin this lovely snapshot. Either way, congrats. |