This looks pretty good, definately has potential to absolutely kick ass. Your chapters possibly could be a bit longer, but maybe the shortness gives the story more of a fast pace. Who knows?

o. I like it. Very 24 like to me...and i love that show.

"watching the Cadets through the glass walls of his office and counting how many he could get suspended for inappropriate footwear couldn’t occupy him indefinitely."

that was my favorite part. I giggled.

next chapter!