The first word that comes to mind after reading your story is cliche. However, it was a cute story and fun to read. You should work on your spelling and the creation of your sentences. There were many awkward phrases and you have tendency to use wrong word choice. But other wise your story is not terrible.

The first thing I noticed about this story was the title, I looked at it and thought to myself "that title says it all, i can tell this story is gonna be good". I know don't judge a book by its cover but i wasnt wrong with the way I judged your story its amazing.

The whole fake realtionship thing is cliche, but normally in stories with this cliche, the realtionship beneifts the female, not the male. When it comes to Cliche writing I think an author can write a cliche and be a good author, or add there own spin to the cliche and be a really good author. You are one of those good authors.

I CAN'T BELIEVE IT'S BEEN A YEAR SINCE I'VE READ THIS STORY! :D

Wow. Time flies so fast.

Loved the story! It was cute! :-)

This seems oddly familiar to this Korean drama called "My Name is Kim Sam Soon."

this is amazing i love the dicription.

Aww, that was so cute! I loved it!

agree, it's kinda like My Name is Kim Sam Soon, a korean series.

I agree too, it's so similar that I can't even give this author the benefit of the doubt. It's definitely very fishy...

this story is excellent. keep up the good work. i can't wait to read more stories from you.

“Oh, please. I believe in Life, Liberty and the pursuit of Chocolate… er… I mean love.”

I love that quote! Not only is the character who said it named Lauren, that's MY name, too!

YAHOO!

HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAA

Sorry I'm just a little wound up.

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Jess spoke! YAY!

Not for the best of reasons, but she still spoke! WHEE!

Okay, before I go any further, can I just say that you have terrific chapter titles?

Just had to say that.

Anyways, GREAT chapter. I'm gonna keep reading now, all right?

great story!..it was a pleasure to read!

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I didn't want anyone to feel weird about me."

"Including me?"

"Especially you!

that is stolen straight from A Walk to Remember