|Reviews for like a penny in a fountain|
| flameofcarrie 1/29/06 . chapter 1
This was very, very good. I liked the rhythm and how the meaning is totally changed with the parantheses. Good.
| sloppy firsts 1/20/06 . chapter 1
Hi, this is pink dandy lion again on my other account :) I think the middle would be better as
'i think it would be better if
me go away.'
It seems to flow better that way.
Keep in mind that this is only a suggestion and if you like it that way then...just ignore this crazy writer :)
| chaos called creation 1/20/06 . chapter 1
The ending could be stronger, but I really liked how you started it off. Keep writing