blasphemy [however slight] is always sexy.

"you carried a switchblade / of glitterglass obscenities in your pocket". i think that's what does it for me. it makes my heart skip a beat, in truth.

crazywonderful. andheartssemicolon

beautiful, like always. glitterglass obscenities and eloquent eyes are the description of the year. i love it. wow, awesome. :)

love, c.induced.

"Glitterglass obscenities". . . wow.So amazing.Powerful.Overflowing with images and emotion.: DYay.

i likeit its very well written... that third stanza is especially awesome

even though it's the title..."tinted fucked" seems to not lend much to the piece...aside from that this was literary orgasm

i know you've reviewed me but i can't remember reviewing you so i am doing so now. the eloquence of this poem is amazing - there seem to be so many people like this just floating around, yet trying to completely reach them or make a distinction always seems so futile. very very good.

this is so cool! "glitterglass obscenities"! YAY. love that phrase. last stanza blows the mind. great work here. the first stanza just seems a little off, though... it doesn't fit quite as well as the rest of the poem, but it's still good. i guess it's because it's focused on the narrator rather than the subject of the poem, unlike the rest. oh well. it's still great.

I adore the descriptions in this. It got so spiteful and angry at the end, a wonderful wonderful last stanza. Well done. Perfect flow.

I adore this. It's such a harsh glimpse at reality. The last stanza is genius personified and I loved "sometimes worlds collide & s p a r k" as well as "because it didn't matter that you were scared/of the dark or that you carried a switchblade/of glitterglass obscenities in your pocket." This reminds me of someone I know.

"(sometimes worlds collide & s p a r k);"

"you used to say nothing (speak without desire)/and leave people breathless, wanting more of/whatever was caught in your eloquent eyes,"

"it was the sand in your hair, the volume in/your voice and the putrid smell of God"

Oh man, I'm in love. This poem is purely beauitful. I loved it! Especially those lines.

I like this. It might be cool if you broke up the lines a little bit, just to make it more interesting, but not bad at all as is. Good stuff.

liking the contrast of appearance and realities. your words flow natural, your imagery is confident and catches such cool thoughts - very good :)

mezzie

Bitter, broken, and all the words are jagged edges. It's not just the police references that make this poem feel like a crime scene. Good job.

god i love this.so violent.

but so upsetting.

I like this, you've got a great way with words.