a hilarious 2 chapters which really wants ont to read on..

just keep the names simpler and stick to the scene longer, you seem to jump from one place to another...

but awesome use of the red bull thing that was superb.

that was so funny! I cant wait for the next chapter. Keep writing!

hey I LOVED YOUR STORY ! both the characters are soo funny seriuosly It made me laugh...i wish u would update though..i am adding u 2 my fave list so i get 2 know when u update...

Excellent black comedy. I look forward to more.