Aw! That was amazing! I love this.

I really like your story, and I love how you put actual histoical things in it, like that whole thing with Paul Revere. I love history and I love historical fiction. Awesome job.

Hi! Thank you so much for your comment on my story. I am so happy you called it cute, cause that's like exactly what I meant it to be. I know it was not so deep a story, but still, it let me speak my mind a lot...Anyhow, I read this story and made a few notes, which I hope you will appreciate and find useful :)First of all, I personally liked the story. Most romantic stuff is right for me!I caught a small spelling mistake in the paragraph where Johnny is introduced - "iin".As for the coherence of the story, just a few spots could be improved on. Firstly, when Johnny goes out after having brung the letter, the father comes in - it seems - directly after, but there is no greeting between the two, or sign that they meet just outside the door or anything, so I conclude that some minutes pass by in between, only I think you should make that more obvious in the text. You could for example just write "A while later the door opened again", or maybe go for something bigger, like describe what Anna does and thinks about in the mean time. Johnny has just gone, so maybe that would be a good place to put in a few hints of her feelings towards him?Then there is the fact that Christ Church is called Old North by the common folk. Anna thinks of it as Christ Church, but I had the impression that both she and her father and Johnny were common folk themselves.Thirdly, Anna starting to cry is touching, and fitting in the situation, but still it sort of comes like a lightning from a blue sky. On her way, she seems doubtful, but also somewhat excited, and not like someone who is on the verge of tears. So maybe you should make her doubt and confusion a little more evident in her thoughts on her way there.This review is becoming longer than I intended, hope you don't mind!The last critical thing I want to add is that you most places seem to have good control of how people spoke back in those times, but there are still a few places where I would not shorten the spoken sentences - for instance when the father asks if anyone called, I would write "DID anyone call while I was away".Other than that I have only praise for this piece. I am very impressed about your 1700's setting, it's a difficult genre to handle, but you do it well. Have you studied the historical background especially? I must admit, being a European, I have no idea what a Tory and a Whig is...Also, I think your character descriptions are really good. They are neat and short, but sort of picks out the essential details about the character, so the reader is not bored with too much detail, but still has no trouble in picturing the person in her/his mind.Besides that I think the suspense during Anna's trip into the church is superbe, and the "one light for my mother, one for my father, two for me" was really well done. When are you going to write a chapter two? I must know what happens later, esp. with Anna and Johnny. Sorry for writing so long a review. Hope it's useful to you!