Awesome! I look forward to more.

So far, this story seems okay! It seems you have it planned out, and that it will be interesting. As far as the short chapters, you should write only as much as you need to; no more, no less. =^.^=

P.S. What's Soren's story?

um...this chapter is rather short...I DUN LIKE SHORT CHAPTERS! Longer...lo-o-o-onger!

pwease?

kamo

Interesting...I started reading your story because I have one like it, and I like the way you described the part with the angel in the mirror. The beginning was very good...it really got into the character's head. Some of the later chapters seem a little vague, but oh well. I really like the little poems at the beginnings of some of the chapters. Keep it up!

Very short indeed..0o please continue!^_^

It's short...hey, what does Goman mean anyways...that's one I haven't picked up yet...

-Slipping Fears(recently known as TaintedBlackTears)

Wondermus. At least you can update, which is more than I can ever say. x_x

This is a really good idea, this cud be really good if u just wrote longer chapters. Please.

w00t! tah Kamo finally found tah Kanna's page! I luffles the story! Tis nice...though dark...oh well! Still awesomeful!

-Tainted

Since it's in first person, you don't have to put ' around her thoughts...and somewhere in there 'new' is supposed to be 'knew'. That's all though! ^^

Dun dun dun! *creepy music* I know what happens XD Nice Kanna. A different beginning to what Mrs. Lowe had.

Lovely poem/inner thought at the beginning, really helped set the mood for the chapter. I thought the thing about the people all looking a certain way through breeding was intriguing, and am wondering what she saw in the mirror. A couple of tenses are off, "I was had been different from everyone else in our town since the day I was bor" was or had been, not both. But it isn't too many, and I think the whole concept of the town, and what she might see in the mirror sounds cool. Nice beginning.