Well, I saw in your profile that you're a Wilde fan, and this certainly has the occasional touch of his voice. Perhaps it's mainly the time setting that does it? Or perhaps not.

At any rate, I'm thrilled that I still have one more chapter to read... And upset, because I have -only- one more chapter to read. *sighs* Ah well. Here I go all the same.

*dies* Such a cute chapter! You had me grinning all the way through, and I was giggling by the time I read those last few paragraphs. Excellent job!

Lovely chapter thus far, though I have noticed a minor typo.

"...but it was thickly streaked (beyond her age) with sliver that the delicate lace cap could not hide, and that made her seem like a white ghost."You typed 'sliver' instead of 'silver,' and I thought I'd point that out. My other comment for this sentence pertains to the "and that made her" part. I don't know exactly why, but those four words seem out of place. Maybe it's their tone? I'm not sure, but I thought I'd say something all the same.

Before I move on to actually commentary, I have one other... criticism, I suppose, though it's really just something I want to point out. I've always been taught that you you end dialogue with a comma when you have a further modifier outside of the quotation marks, and a period when you don't. You've done the opposite in your story, and I was just curious to know if there's a reason why.

Now, as for commentary...

I adore Katherine already! She makes me smile. I'm glad to see and learn more about David's family life, and I'm still in love with your writing style. There were a few spots where a word or phrase seemed slightly out of place, but I'm not sure how to fix them and thus won't point out anything specific. Great job so far, though!

Once again, the word "charming" springs immediately to mind as I read this story. "Charming" and "delightful." Apparently your characters are already having their way with my word choices. *smiles* Lovely chapter. *goes on to read more*

Heh. Charmingly amusing first chapter; I'm glad to see that there are several more posted already, so I don't have to wait for ages to see how your story is shaping up. I didn't find any mistakes in this first chapter, and that in and of itself is quite refreshing. *keeps reading*

Another chapter! I'm so happy! and I wonder how the relationship between Philip and David will develop!it's a angst story, isn't it? I wonder if there will be a lot of angst! don't make me cry too hard (however, I like to cry too...)! I'm always waiting for the next chapter, my dear girl!

interesting story. I love slash so much so I'll probably be reading more of this.

YES! THEY HAVE TO DANCE TOGETHER! er...and I'm relieved that you won't give up this story! an update once a week! great! hehe and you've no idea how happy your story makes me! thanks for your kind reply! keep up the good work!

What's the time period for this story/ It seems like an earlier time period. And I sort of understand a little bit of David's quietness and reclusiveness now.

You've updated! I'm so happy! thank a lot! you know i was afraid you gave up on that story! so thank you again! that chapter is really interesting and i am very curious to know how the story will evolve! and i love angst! I LOVE YOU! -sigh- and I've to wait for the next chapter...i hope you'll update soon...anyway I'll wait...please continue! it's a very gripping story!

hehe it's an interesting story and I want to see more of it so...I hope you'll update soon, don't you? it's a very promising start...