Cool - are you doing any more?

You have some nice descriptions going one. I liked the detail in the fire, cold and the air. One piece of advice I have is this:

I/you. Try not to use /. It makes the sentence look strange and IMO is akin to using @ + and the like.

I hope that helps. ^^ If you want, feel free to leave me a review.

I like how you go into such vivid description, like with the toes. It lets the reader know exactly what you're talking about. ^_^