heh, I'm back. But don't worry, I won't leave an outrageously long review that'll make you want to rip your hair out :) I'll leave it simple so you don't have to read so much.

This story was amazing. I'm not sure if I saw any mistakes, though I think there may have been a few errors (very minor, since I can't recall them anymore). And it did seem as if it was on repeat in the beginning, but I still liked it despite it kept continuing on in the same fashion: go to school, get beat up, run into Rei. But don't worry, I still enjoyed every single thing. I also tended (cause my mind is stupid at times) to mix up Rei and Sho for some reason. Like I'd think Rei was Sho and Sho was Rei, but don't worry, that's all my fault lol. I got past it after a little while :)

Now, on to the characters (though it will be short). Rei aggravated me a lot. At times it was hard for me to believe that he loved Sho, cause he did so many things that someone wouldn’t do to someone they loved. Example: say things purposely knowing it’ll hurt them, show they care than turn around and act as if they don’t, leave with your brother when you just admitted that you were almost raped (that one really made me mad at Rei!!), leave when you were the reason that the other person got shot (at least stay until they’ve recovered so they aren’t alone!!), show up at the hospital when you said you would!!, and so much more. My god, Rei did so much to Sho... he kind of reminds me of Aillen at times, with how awful he treats Sho. Though there are times when he treats him with care.

Sho is cute. I absolutely love him. He may seem weak at times, but I feel he’s pretty strong. He loves Rei, he gets hurt by Rei, but no matter what he sticks by Rei. He doesn’t leave him behind, he tells him he loves him and accepts Rei for who he is. He deals with how Rei treats him because he loves him. I think that shows strength. Any weak person would leave the other one behind because they wouldn’t be able to deal with it. The hurt. The constant hot and cold characteristics. Sho is perfect for Rei. I really loved reading about both characters.

You again showed major flaws in both characters, but they left a good outcome. And still, very realistic. This story is really good, and I’m glad I read it. And now, I’m off to read the sequel!! I can’t wait. Hopefully it doesn’t end sad...

-eVil uNicorns-

Wow, it took 2 datys, but I read it all!!1

I liked the new ending better (for the sake of the sequel, that is), but I think the original one was... I don't know, I liked it, and by the time I was reading chapter 30 I somehow knew something like that was going to happen. Probably that explains why I felt so happy on the new one.

I almost cried on the original ending. ALMOST. (too proud to cry).

Sequel! Seuqeul! Sequel!

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James

Ah, I want to finish reading it today, but it is already one in the morning and I can't hold on...

And I can't give a decent review as well, but I'll try again tomorrow.

Just so you know, I like it so far, and the only reason I stopped reading is that some things are not making sense anymore as my brain looses its ability to process words...

Anyway, tomorrow...

James

All I can say about this story, it that it was amazingly written. The plot went smoothly and had great tempo. The character hardly ever were out of character. There weren't many dramatical or spelling errors, only sometime you would forget to put spaces between words. The only thing that wasn't right with the story was the guy which Sho had confessed to. His actions seemed to steriotipical and with out personality. Like he was just there to fill when nothing came up. However, like I said before, everything else was magnificent! The story was beyond creative and insightfull. It is beautiful piece of work.

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OMG OMG OMG! That was amazing.
I'm so sorry I didn't review sooner! I was so engrossed in my reading, I didn't find the time to..
Ah. Rei and Sho. This story is just.. Hahh. Let me just say I love it and am very glad I found it on LiveJournal!
The alternate ending was a bit weird.. It made me cry though..I was just so sad.. I cried! GOD, I love you! xD Don't be scared.. lol
Still, I want the sequel. Now. XD
Thanks for taking the time to write this.. *sighs* =D

omg the "Alternate Ending" scared me, he died in that ending I was hope Rei never comes back and he found another guy or something.Love the story =D

HURRAH!
ok
i'm sorry i didn't review and stuff earlier
but i like to save that til the end
i'm not really into this...
gay stuff{yaoi i suppose if u know what that is}
and usually just like
oh..
blah..
and don't read it
but
i stuck with urs
i liked it
a lot
sad
but good
like...
tingles of sad pain to the tips of my fingers
lol
if u know what i mean
so
ANYHOW!
GOOD JOB!
i shall read the sequal
but
not tonight
i am VERY tired
i'll...review on that one later then i guess

Ok, this is a really good story. I like it alot. I have a question though. Who just kissed Sho? Rei or the guy he admitted to loving?

This story is really good and I like it so far. I like the characters and the ways things are progressing. The only problem I have is that we never really meet Rei's friends. They never even seem to talk and I think you should introduce them. It'd be more interesting that way. We'd get to see how his friends felt about the situation.

*stares at... rubs eyes... stares at more*
...
...
*breaks into hysterical crying*
NO! He didn't say it back! Damnit!
But oh man, I can't believe I was away from this story for so long! I just remembered it yesterday and had to see where it went and I come back and find it ended?!?!!? *slaps forehead*
There was so much happening these last first chapters since I last reviewed! I can't believe Sho was shot! ERGH!! ((Yes, I'm ranting, your story is that good))
Then Rei was beat up and there was blood and Sho was shot and Rei blamed himself and... *squeals, cries, yells, cries some more*
The ending I though, was perfect. Not the alternate one though, because that just made it feel too cut off and empty to me, IDK.
As always, very interesting work, you kept it together and didn't forget from one chapter to the next ((as I do, -.-'))
and it was just... so... perfect!!
Loved reading it, can't wait for the sequel, off to raid your other stories. *hands over more Sho and Rei plsuhies*

I really like this story.

I didnt so much dig the alternate ending, but i loved the whole story, and i wept with glee at the end of the non alternate ending. when do you think you'll put the sequel up?

I found this story about a week ago. I have since read the entire thing twice.

I loved the characters, the dialogue, everything. There was at least one line or action in each chapter that completely made my heart melt.

The mistakes I noticed (I'm only listing these because you mentioned the possibility of getting it published):1) Repeated use of the word "loose" instead of "lose".2) "Your" instead of "You're" and vice versa.3) Occasional run-ons.Those were the main grammar things. As far as the story goes, I think it was close to perfect. Best story on fictionpress I've read.

*still in awe*

Wow, this fic made me so happy. I was driving home from school one day and someone threw a cigarette butt out his window and I saw it swirling around on the ground, with smoke still coming out of it. I had a very minor, internal freak out and caught myself looking around for Rei. Hahaha, in all honesty, this story got into my head. One of my biggest problems with reading stories is that most of the time I don't really care if I never finish them, but this one...I had to finish. Twice. And I'll probably read it again in a couple of months, after I've forgotten most of it.

Anyway...congratulations on writing an AMAZING story.

sniff* amazing fic! ive been reading it for a while now and i luv it!! umm lets see. i actually like the alternate ending better but the first endings good too. lol maybe im just saying that cuz sho lives and i wanna read the sequel =) neway. great fic! cant wait till the sequel =)

I love both endings, but I like Sho alive because he's a great character and I love the love in this story.