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| simpleplan13 2006-03-18 ch 1,   | I like it... love the repition at the end... nice message too |
| mizu no kokoro 2006-02-27 ch 1, | it has a rather catchy beat to it... hm... good work keep writing! |
| FunkyFlower17 2006-01-27 ch 1, | love the beginning, but i'm not so sure about the ending...i think that needs a little work. cuz at the beginning it's like there's a rhyme scheme starting but it sort of evapourates after one or two lines. otherwise, great job! i love the hurrying sorta pace throughout and the repetition at the end just emphasises the point. keep writing, ~mez~ |
| TiEka Koniku 2006-01-24 ch 1, | interesting. that would be kinda cool to set to music. but what type of music? let me know. ttyl. -hugs- *TI* |
| Vexed and Tired 2006-01-23 ch 1, | Nice, I wanted to write something like this but I couldn't do it without making it sound really corny. I'm so glad you did a better job than I did. |
| shinco 2006-01-22 ch 1, | Hey, Shazaam, you should make that into music! That would be great! It would be awesome! Maybe I could help you... MAYBE, lol Nice one, like it lots! GO SHAZAAM! |