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| Aslan Israel 2006-02-19 ch 1,  | abuseM I love the rhythm. Just delicious. |
| a lonely september 2006-02-03 ch 1, | abusewow. i absolutely love the way this was written, it was so often. the topic was great, too. so real. |
| insertterriblypoeticlineher... 2006-01-23 ch 1, | abuseThis poem hit me for some reason. Is it bad that it reminds me slightly of myself? Maybe I'm being self-indulgent.Just to be nitpicky about one thing -"but defiantly insistent that this next departure/ is the one THAT will wrench her free," right? Don't mean to mess with any creative license or anything, but it threw me off.This was a good poem, though, just true to itself and simple. I liked 'self-destructive muses of rising chords' and 'loving her in reackless blue' and 'it leaves her skin/ faux-mischevious violet to the touch.' Beautiful phrases there. I think I actually enjoyed this more than some of your more recent poems. It's a change from the norm. Good job. =) |