"sweaty sinlike giving intwo hearts, but no thoughts

just the furtive lustproduced by love-rustand moisture, your brow, dots"

For some odd reason I had a deja vu when I read that. I have no idea why...

This poem was splendid. The imagery was amazing. The ending was gorgeous! Keep writing!

"above the world, grey skies hide shining starsviewed by bright eyes while the wrists just crawl with scarsand the rhythm gets slower as the time goes byuntil the end becomes a jumble and the meaning has gone dry."Beautiful way to end the piece.I love your style. It's very different but very effective at conveying emotion. Nice write.

This is not quite as good as 'silence' but it has it's own charm. THe fourth stanza was the best. I loved the idea of 'love-rust.'

-pictographic.love