Whoa, so Jason and Max are really gonna do it. Will Jason find out what happened to his father? Keep writing!

Pretty deep story, Davis, though there are some grammatical problems.

Overall, though, you've definitely improved as a writer. I hope to see more of this story soon.

Oh, and if you get the chance, read and review my new novel-in-progress: Recommission.

oi...interstink...I have, I must admit, thought about life efore, but in another situation...not going there though. Anyways, It's rather intreeging(lol, sp) sofar!

~TaintedBlackTears