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L. X. Petrik 2007-02-21 . chapter 1
Abstract thought. Broken and hurt, real. i like it. But there seems to be a little too much repition for my taste. You repeat similar words, but not the same words. It sort of distracts form the peice. Well, done over all.
briannathewriter 2006-01-23 . chapter 1
Good use of fragmented lines to create a much more dramatic effect. Sometimes it can just be stupid but you worked with this effect very well to get better impact out of it. Good job.
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