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| no.peace.los.angeles 2006-04-02 ch 1,   | Aw, I love sweet love poems. Cute. Keep writing! :) |
| simpleplan13 2006-03-19 ch 1, | I wouldent have any other but you?...wouldn't I couldent Imajine Life any other way...couldn't imagine And Baby .. have I mentioned latly...lately I like this a lot.. it's very sweet I feel the same about my boyfriend.. nicely done |
| GC Age 2006-01-24 ch 1, | Ok honestly if I was your husband and I read this I would, probly rip it up and toss it into the fire! (lol jk) (Ok just make sure you dont show it to any of his friends lol) Ok honestly it was not that bad, not great but not bad. YOu have alot(did I say alot, I ment elephent size)(lol) spelling and grammer mistakes through out it. Also the format could be changed to make it look better(but I guess fictionpress formating messed that up) . The use of personal pronouns was very ineffective to me personally, you should consider conserving the use of them. Furthermore, since you do make spelling/grammer mistakes alot consider makeing them on certain words or lines yet having a meaning in them(poetry is more then words it is language!)Keep on writing for the rest of your life and have a good mirige) |
| The-Original-Neko 2006-01-24 ch 1, | i had actualy forgooten love was realpush my self away from it but your poem was great |
| kvnchn 2006-01-24 ch 1, | aw... that's so sweet.. My eyes are watering already... but then again, my eyes water whenever i see the word love... hmm... wow... total disgrace to guys eh? lmao.. o well... seriously.. your poem roxorz everyones soxorz! |