i love all the stanzas in this, i can relate to them so much, this is my fav poem, like ever, well done!

Hm...I agree, the title could use some work. But the poem itself - OMG. This is INCREDIBLE. The words are so powerful; they drive the reader onward, tear at the heart, and feel pleasurable all at once. Beautiful, beautiful, beautiful.

You're right, it does need a better title, but it is a good poem, a great poem, again one of yours where the words are themselves more powerful than the statements because of the formatting of dividing lines into a stanza. And don't live in regret. "Silver release" may cut away the thicket that keeps you from progressing along the road you must forge to return to Dream and Immortal(ity). "I rerached out and tried to take what I could" is an interesting line, as it was already given and is still being given. And believe me, you have something to accompany "darkness" and "nothing" but only when you realize that something is there will you acheive everything, or rather a genuine "eternity".

This is a beautiful poem. I love the third stanza with the crimson wings and blood red dreams. It's really vivid imagery. I wish I could draw as well as the images words evoke in my head.

:O AMAZING. I really like this. :D Morbidness ...

i agree title needs a little work. i liked imortal nyght. but also what about "scars that echo" or "suffercating promises" just some ideas! good luck with this. such a beautiful poem deserves a beautiful name.

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