I know you're trying to make a point, but you say "think" and "alone"... a lot in this poem. It becomes kind of annoying. Surely there are other words you could use for think, such as contemplate... or something.

Like in this stanza:

I’m good at it, see how
I twist it all around
I bring myself to the brink of tears
By thinking through everything

The first two lines are wonderful, the third looks like it's going to lead up to something, but the last line is a let down. It's another "think" line, and it just doesn't have the poetic feel that the other three lines have.

I can agree with the sentiment expressed here, though - I think way too much as well.

-Jesse
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again. love this poem yet i think you could end with but she reads the truth. The last 2 lines you have kind of feels unsuitable as an ending..i dunno maybe its me but i think if you delete the last 2 lines itd sound better...just a suggestion.

I identify with this! A little too much, really.. anyway, nicely written! =)

First I just want to say im mad because for the life of me I cant figure out how to place the space between my stanzas. Every time I try it always bring them back together. So kudos to you for that. onto the review.

I really like the last three stanzas. I was trying to find the rhythm. I do spoken word. This would make a great spoken word. Some of the influxes are a lil difficult so you would have to change a word here or there but Definitely a sweet lil poem in its own right.

~Cheers~

most excellent!captures the mood exactly when you just can't stop that thinking. bad, bad ideas.