I think the word you are after is cliched, not clique (by the way, the e has an accent but my comp. can't mange that. Also, you wrote 'from a mousse point of view' instead of 'from a mouse point of view'. I really enjoyed this story. If you really want to be published, one of the most important things to do is to send your work to people. Send your work to magasines, children's newspapers, annual publications. In New Zealand we have books like Redraft which come out every year, filled with writing by and for young adults. Also, I have in the past had work published by NZ Post - the postal service which also runs writing competitions and magasines. Once you have had your work published in this sort of place a few times it ismuch easier to get work published as a comercial venture (or so I have been told- I'm not there yet!). I hope you find this advice helpful and don't forget- No matter what anyone says, KEEP WRITING!

I really like this. Anterae reminds me a lot of myself actually >_< You're very clever in your writing which isn't something you get often in this type of story. Keep up the good work!

Very good. I really like it :-) Update soon!

liv

btw, ur writing make me feel like im actually reading a book, not just a story.

That's really cool. I like how it could either be justa one chpater thing, or it could continue. Very nice. :-)