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Nemonus 2006-07-27 ch 1,	abuseInteresting! Some lines sounds forced or more silly than I would imagine you to make them purposefully silly (I hope that made sense) but some I like a lot; "must-find-my-essence" "howling at the moon/(with three other girlsi like but hardly ever talk to in school)/on the jetty/at survival camp/i survived" "wish I was more than just wordplay"
Atelophobia 2006-02-04 ch 1,	abuse& you come back with a superduper poem. I heart. :D
Vyolet 2006-02-02 ch 1,	abuseInteresting. I've read this and another of yours, and you're smart for a kid. Please don't resent me saying that, later you'll agree (please don't resent me saying that either). For your age and your lack of experience you have a distinct ability with words, and you're fairly self-aware. You're original, which is nice to see, and you're very bright. However try to not get too immersed in this angst/we're all alone/you don't understand me and never will . It's boring. If you really want to go down that line, then work hard to make your's have some worth, some depth - because most people here are writing that stuff.
Chi Ame 2006-01-29 ch 1,	abuseGlad you are back! This is very creative and imaginative... it kind of sounds like an overview of a story; like flashes of different situations briefly touched upon. It's a neat effect.
a lonely september 2006-01-27 ch 1,	abusewow, i love this. it's wonderful, so amazingly written, has a feeling that's hard to capture.
poetic abortion 2006-01-27 ch 1,	abusethis is so random. (and i mean the good random. not the 'bleh, i have no idea what you are referring to' random) it is vivid in wordplay, creative in format and just...oh my god, gorgeous. lovelovelove the last three to seven lines. it is so gorgeous. ~* noelle
Aimee Raven 2006-01-27 ch 1,	abuseI adore the wordplay, it was ** amazing. And it really did get the message across too! I love Maps...they don't love you like I love you :). And I can relate to how you feel...but things always get much better, I promise you, I'm glad you're back writing! This is awesome! Love, Mia
Laiqualaurelote 2006-01-27 ch 1,	abuseThis is......very random. Especially thingslike Maps and the Suvi referencethe puns, in generalis alarmed by Singlish, butje suis comme ca. The lo/n/s/v/er is a cunning one, really it is. All in all, it sounds random and slightly removed from your usual incisiveness, and generally not a poem I should choose to break hiatus with, but it's still good to have you back.
Ohmm 2006-01-27 ch 1,	abuseOoh, this is definitely more personal than others in that there are a lot of details, references that outsiders won't get! Like OBS and Suvi and everything; but I think this is a mighty good rant that all the emotions all raw and powerful tumble out one after another.

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