i found it really sad but i love the way the words come together with the feelings on longin its a whole love story wrapped till the end hands down~

This made me shudder. The ending seems so abrupt, but often times, so is death. Very beautiful poem. Keep writing!

Aww...very good! I like particularly the sadness that comes with this...keep it up! ^.^

wow this is great! I love it!keep it up!!

'Her crimson tears tainted his soul.Her screams made him whole.'

these are my favourite lines and what made me read this. it explains everything somehow.

oh i like this! it rhymes well but its subtle so it gives it a nice underlying rhythm. there's a lot of emotion in this and it flows well. congratulations.