I adore the ending. I'm sort of listening to Dan Cook (comedian) right now, so it's kind of ruining the aura about this peice. The language is amazing, but some of the phrases go against he flow, like the second line in the second stanza. It felt...off some how. But aside from that, another masterpiece to add to your colleciton. Very nice job.

I love the rhyming scheme. If I had one like that, I'd probably end up killing myself before I finished. Such beautiful lines! Elegant despite the sadness tinged into it. Absolutely amazing! Great job!

Nice one.