Sad poem but great in its art. Keep Writing!

Wow. Love the metaphor in this. Simple, but beautifully done.

Hawke

I like this.. so sad and well done.. beautiful metaphor for someone abandoning you.. it's cool bc it can apply to a lot of situations... ncie job

Aww this is sad...i like it...the idea of you loving someone so much and them just looking out for themself while you lie there, sprit (and body) broken. This is a good one...keep writng forever and always...

Jessica

Wow babe. Very deep. Definitely a goodie.

Much Love-Suicidal_Greeting

OMG...very powerful and its so sad, i love it though, i can relate big time, well done this is GREAT!

This is so beautiful and amazing, i absoulutely love this piece, not a single flaw, excellent job!

This is really good! Very powerful and the imagery is really strong. Great work! QueenVixta

t is a very nice poem, but your lines are broken kind of strangely in this poem. Anyways, nice poem! :)

this is so sad. i love the chorus-y bit. great piece.

aw such a good poem. but the guy is definatyl a jerk. ]