Hah, of course you leave me hanging here! ;)

I like how Xatu thinks about the footprint size, while Irigal is just furious. Of course I'd be a little nervous of getting shot at again by hiding elves if I was there.

I hope you get more written in less than a year!

Okay, this followed logically from the earlier encounter, and of course I'm curious as to what they'll find.

Aw, very sweet. His guilt and the whole exchange makes Xatu very appealing. I like the last line too.

Nice selection of new chapters here, made for a quick, entertaining read.

My only pick here would be that if the spell on the bandage is 'really hard,' then I'd expect it to involve either:
1) magic words like in the 'staying attached' spell
2) a bit of time
3) an obvious drain of energy, and they've both already spent a bit in the escape.

That's it! Hope to see the rest someday. =)

I know this is a kiddie book, but...
Can arrows really travel that far? Well, as far as your picture description seems to lend the idea of, especially if it's somewhat upward.

Poor Xatu. Glad he has Irigal there to consider the consquences!

*chuckles* Why am I not surprised?

Great to have more of this delightful little story!

Only one pick:
"They flew low over the trees because it was very cloudy and they did not want to miss the city"

This appears to contradict
"They looked so tiny because Xatu was still high above them."

I've a feeling there might be trouble coming... ;)

Sorry I haven't reviewed in ages, I haven't had a computer in ages and then I had exams... This story is so cute. I hope all goes well with the humans.

Nelarun of Australia

I think in the picture there would have to be some kind of indication that this is a daydream and not reality, so that little kids reading it didn't get confused. Something like blurry edges to the picture, with Irigal's head at the bottom and her eyes closed... something like that.

An enjoyable set of chapters, well written and simple but not boring, and I'm looking forward to what they find when they reach the Humans.

I like that there is equal blame for the war. It's far more realistic than one side being 'evil'.

I can't quite decide whether or not I like the first paragraph, the way it skips over the entire summer. I can understand why you don't want to show the whole thing, as it would slow the book down, but at the same time I feel like I've missed out. Also, why does it take Xatu as long as aumtumn to realise that he wants to see the Dwarves?

Uh-oh...humans...Glad to make it to chapter 22 without seeing em, though. ;)

Sorry I'm not being very helpful, but there's nothing glaring that's jumping out at me here.

The ax raising and lowering is just fun--I can see a good storyteller getting a bit of yardage out of that with the kiddies.

Ah, some more lighthearted fare--perfect for reading over breakfast.

*grins* Kids have to be introduced to the 'we come in peace' phrase sometime, don't they?