I really like your writing because it's so completely unexpected, without being random to the point of making it seem like you're trying too hard. I think your brain is a different color on the inside (blue? purple?) while the vast majority of the rest of ours are grey.

{And if you're anything like me, that wasn't random- that made sense, somehow}

I liked this one, though it's not my favorite of your works.

P.S. I recognized a few stanzas... "you fed me deception, i spit out lubrication.." and I know it's of free use for everyone but... is it ok if I'm flattered??

I love the format so much, those little black hearts. This poem really gets me--shot right through my own little black heart. I'm so jealous! Favorite line ever? -- "i guess you can say/i'm still addicted to almond lotion/ sex/ smoke/ blood/ and that/ piercing you got/ in spite of their/ words"--... Okay, so I guess it's more like the whole verse. But it's just so angst-ridden and perfect! So dark and masochistically sensual... LoVe it. Great work. Be reading more :)

Dare I say I loved it? The words flow well and I love the description of "almond lotion and blood" and I love love love when you talk about "the troubled generation" because it's so true how ridiculous it is when there are all these articles about "kids today" and "promiscuity"...nice writing. "on my ah" is a little bit...I don't know...not flowing as well. It sounds sort of coy, which the rest of this poem definitely isn't. Could you maybe say "on me" or something, if you don't want to say it outright? ANYHOW. Great poem.

Wow. I loved it. It was erotic without being graphic and just really good. You used all the words beatuifully and the last three lines were a great closing. Good job.