wow ^^ (lol) i like it even though im still young but i like it ^^

Funny, I live in Korea as well. :)

I like the rhyming and the diction. But you should be careful when you use "thee" and "thou"--"old" English. For example, in the very first line, "does" should be "dost"... etc.

I do like the style though, much better than the unoriginal free verse everyone posts these days.

i love the old-fashioned style you've used: the rhyme and the lexis (like thee and thy) is perfect for a poem of this theme. great job!