Wow, that was some deep stuff there. It was very interesting, and it almost seemed as if it really could have happened to someone.I like how you made it so that it wasnt super dramatic (although that has its place in the world of writing), but rather simple. There were no catastrophic demon attacks, no massive blasts of magical energy, and no swarms to mutated, deformed spirits. Just one, ordinary, woman shaped spirit and a girl in a barn. Keep up the good work

I'm sorry to say but this is fanfiction, and this site is for writing ORIGNIAL fiction only. But, if you sent this to fanfiction you'll probably get more reviews.

~Waterhealer