I love it, especially the saveme part. Great job. :D

but you're in heaven,

and i'm at the bottom of the sea.

no, tonight we'll make believe

but i still wish you were here --

nevertheless, and for always.

just...

saveme saveme saveme if i fall?

Oh, gosh! little chills from that one. 'but you're in heaven, and i'm at the bottom of the sea. no tonight we'll make believe.' x I love it! It's so...perfect. =S x

Very good, the first and last lines were brilliant.

"but you're in heaven,and i'm at the bottom of the sea."ur a genius!!i love it.

beautiful...

I loved this one, one of your best so far. The style of it really made it that much more enjoyable.

'make believe' ... it's a lovely thing, isn't it? :) great work! especially the last line... keep writing. :)

Wow. This is great. I especially like the style, and the first line. Really amazing :)

I love the style on this poem. The way you put the date and title bolded in the poem is a BIT distracting though. Not that it matters, the poetry's brilliant.

Oh wow, this is so heartwrenchingly beautiful, I love it. You've expressed so much in a relatively short piece. Great work!!

This is great, masterful work. I like this piece, can relate to it in some sense. Loved how it gave off that longing feel for something more, very effective. Keep writing.

i like this! especially 'no, tonight we'll make believe'. great piece!