this is both well-thought-out & emotional at the same time, which marks a really good piece in my mind. it has some really clever lines- such as "and if mouths are gashes your wrists scream". really good job.

Now this one sounds more personal, with a bit of added imagery for flavor. If you took it away, what would be left?

why does everyone write sex so stupendously? it's really horrifically unfair. i adore every ounce & mushroom in this poem, leaves me licking my lips & feeling smilingguilty of all the weight i must be putting on with all this eyeliner love.

I loved the entire poem. Amazing work.

beautiful, absoloutely brilliant! i love the last line of the first stanza especially, but the whole poem is truly a wonderful piece of word.

+faves

I like this. It's somewhat hypnotic and sucks you in.I love the beginning, especially the line '(and if mouths are gashes your wrists scream', and I love the way you use an open bracket and don't close it, giving the impression of open-endedness (is that even a word?).The line that I love most of all is: '(and you only love me when i’m not there.) this isthe aftermath of you&me.'Please keep writing.

This is wonderful!

b e a u t i f u l

i loved every second of it.

x3

"i hate noticing you, reddamp sleevesand clutching holly leaves (and you a holly chess-piece, and i’d havewilling been your ebony, the bishop the white to your black(and together we were everywhere and everything, i wasthe queen for a king)"

Oh, god. This rings so true and real with me it hurts. "Reddamp sleeves" "and you a holly chess-piece". It's funny, because, about the same person this makes me think of, I wrote a poem using the chess pieces idea too. I don't know what it is that describes it so well in an ebony figurine...but it's beautiful, anyway, beautiful, and spewing out words I feel I've choked back too long. Congratulations. x

tragic & oh so beautiful ♥

wow. this is simply amazing.

this is gorgeous. I love 'and if mouths are gashes your wrists scream' and 'youwho had an apocalypse etched in your bones'. Amazing lines! Fantastic tone, really like it.

Excellent, you once again blend in so many divergent aspects that converge so well. Very unique lines and word twists throughout. Wonderful, once again. Good write.

Beautiful. A bit confusing, but... you know, I think it just adds to the mystery of this piece. Morbid... in an odd, rustic sort of way. Yeah. Well, what I'm trying to say is... nice job.

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Wow. Maybe it's just me, but this seems deep. Or perhaps, you know something I don't Either way, it spoke to me in my own personal way about my current relationship. "The carnage of you and me." I also love the first stanza. I love the whole thing!