   laughter at the funeral 2006-09-23 . chapter 1great metaphor, its one that's quite overused but you managed to make it unique...this poem is really cute but serious...
truly yours...ps: i like sherbet... |
 Werelynx 2006-06-15 . chapter 1Hm. Yogurt, huh? I dunno...I'm partial to shaved ice.
All jokes aside, this poem's satirical enough to be just plain funny.
Thankyou, ma'am, may I have another? |
| poet tree 2006-04-30 . chapter 1 m. sherbet. tasty.
love the metaphor here - and yes, i know exactly what kind of best friend this is. excellent. |
| Ellin Louise 2006-04-09 . chapter 1 Very interesting concept here, I love the description. |
 My New Pen Name 2006-04-03 . chapter 1Wow. . . crazy. Great metaphor. Very original. I love it!! : D |
| e a t i n g . f l o w e r s 2006-03-11 . chapter 1 This was just awesome. I loved the imagry. It was very masterful. Especially the last bit about going out of style. That was great. So keep it up. |
| S0ulSearching 2006-02-23 . chapter 1 Yum ^__ I loved this, I think it's one of my favorites. I really loved the lines "becauseShe was onlyThe next best flavorAnd goingOut of style."Ugh, amazing.Keep it up.--pammy- |
 crinkled aster ribbon 2006-02-21 . chapter 1tasty.
this poem is wonderful. sosoawesome.
She was only/The next best flavor/And going/Out of style./ |
| sunday night sky 2006-02-21 . chapter 1 '(and they wanted a bigger size)But petite was popular' just beautiful. very original. lovely imagery. great work! |
 citrus scented 2006-02-07 . chapter 1wow, this is just d-e-l-i-c-o-u-s . love it so much. theres so much too it, so sickly sweet girl... "petite was popular but, sickening and vulgar"...love it. perfect similees and images, great piece. |
 FunkyFlower17 2006-02-04 . chapter 1pretty good. just love the way u combined in food with imagery. awesome as always,
~mez~ |
| It Sounds Horrible 2006-02-03 . chapter 1 fresh symbolism is what this world needs more of. |
| Margot Tenenbaum 2006-02-03 . chapter 1 o this is good!very creative, connecting the ice-cream flavors with the different "prototypes" of girls. |
| Vivian Rose Pierce 2006-02-02 . chapter 1 I like frozen yogurt too, but such is the life of the next best flavor.
A delicious poem. |
 none of burt's beeswax 2006-02-02 . chapter 1This is gorgeous and heartbreaking and very, very clever. I love the comparison of a girl ** to a trendy, new flavor of ice cream. Sherbet eyes and hips like cotton candy are only some of the amazing images you have in here. For some reason, this girl makes me think of a broken fairy (maybe because I always think of sherbet as pink and fairies as pink, too). Anyway, this is really amazing work. I loved it. |
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