I love it! Of course, this might be because I have the tendency to write time as sand, also (although I normally use an hourglass), and I've written one like this. But that's okay.

Well, I'm sorry, but I normally suck at writing reviews. I apologize. I would write better ones, but I can never think of what to say until about four days later.

Much love...TinuvielDork

i can't quite understand why this doesn't have 20 reviews. this is so good and so universal in its message that it would appeal to EVERYONE on fictionpress. that reviewer guy is an author at heart, but you're a poet in fact!

Pretty good, it has a nice flow to it and is easy to read. The ideas and thoughts portrayed in the poem are great too.

This is really really well done. I applaud you for writing something so beautiful like this, even if it's short. I love how you associated time with sand and your 2 rhymes were wow. I love this...A LOT.