Oh I liked this a lot. The imagery was deep and intense, and your lines were intimidating. Well done.

This is a very picky criticism.I think you meant "Thoughts Du Jour" -- thoughts of the day-- rather than "Thoughts De Jour" -- thoughts the day.

or maybe that was just adding the the randomness...

It is random, but I think a lot of them would work for realities sake. That first opening line. I liked it. It’s always fun to just write and not give a ** about if it works or not, I think it refreshes us. Keep up the good work.

Much love,Juliet.

this IS random, lol, but i like it! interesting rhyme scheme, it works well. nice piece!