Death must take its path before long, I think. And whatever beast strangled this poor rose to death! This rose that's only crime was to laugh and smile and pat itself on the head.

I'm being sarcastic, of course, and I don't mean to but this poem has too much of a Good-is-better-than-Evil kinda theme and I detest radical views like that (y'know what I mean?)

The thing is, this rose has to die. Something or another. Even if it represents all the things that are good in life, even if it represents the very brilliance of Life itself. It has to go. Kill it.

Ok let me pause a sec. Even though I think this poem has too much of a melodramatic tone I'd say your wording is smooth and word choices are good, though at times inappropriate.

Like 'The main vein is cruising' I didn't get that and don't see how it fits in (Don't know what the heck it means.) And I don't see the need to emphasize "On this day of Death" as the reader already knows the rose is dying upon multiple clues, first of all the poem is named 'death of rose' and you've given elaborate descriptions of how exactly the rose slowly wilts and comes to a heart-stopping end.

The word 'cry' repeats two times in this poem, I don't konw if you intended that. "Throats cry" is much similar to the line "Cry your tears" and though I see the meanings of 'cry' differ you can alternately substitute BOTH meanings in the first one to say 'throats groan and also weep' and...I don't know if I'm making any sense...?

Alright now to put an end to my too-long and too-much-indepth analysis I'd say I like the last 6 lines as it is underlining the theme that "Death has come to reclaim its throne" by somehow strangling Life and replacing it. Kinda brings about a morbid view on Things, though a physical description of 'Death' isn't really given other than that it's implied as 'Black and cunning' and the contrast between 'Black on Red' on the last line (which I think is Death on Life what you mean) is really somewhat weak, in that it really DOESNT contrast that much compared to 'Black on white' which is the customary view of life on death and...

...ok I feel I didn't even understand half of what I just said but to summarize what I said I liked your poem :)

I loved reading this poem. The last four lines possibly my favorite. Keep up the good work! (If by chance I somehow submit more than one review, blame fictionpress for timing out x.x)