Hahaha, love the 'rules'. This was a great chapter, and although the last chapter was a great way to end the whole story, this fit too. You'd think they are older than they really are, until the start worrying about their mother's consequences. Anyways, nice job pickle. Keep it up!

Damn that Kane. At least he agreed to abide by the rules. Tricky Dale coming back into the picture like that. But seriously, only Kane would think this was the ideal job, lol, Mr. I Want To Be a Stunt Double... but I guess that one did change. What happens if you guys change your minds about being Hunters? Hm... That's an interesting question, if I do say so myself.

Oh, btw, I totally resent the fact that I wasn't in this chapter either.

;)

Just kidding, lol. I think it was good with just the three of you, as always :) I like how Reed convinced your mom to get you a laptop. If only I had a brother with powers like that... Well, to be honest, I myself have those powers, I'm just too nice to use them. I'd feel really guilty. Oh well. Some day. But long lasting injuries like that suck don't they? I couldn't imagine not being able to use my hand like normal. I'd have to learn to do everything like Kim... Poor guy. He was trying to use a lint brush today, and it's designed (we've found out) for right handed people only. If you try and roll it downwards with your left hand it unravels. Hehe. Anyway, I'm glad Kale got the laptop to help her write her wonderful stories.

I can't wait for the sequel! Good job!

Keira

The end?! Darn, I was expecting a lot more blood and gore! But hey, this chapter was great nonethless. The last line was great, and real clever, "We deserved some sweet dreams after this nightmare." too true, man! Kinda sad that Dale legged it, without saying goodbye, but I gotta a feeling Kale hasn't seen the last of him. Anyways, great chapter!

That chapter was a...i don't know how to say it! I first thought Kales friends were going to die but when you made it so that her gandpa dies...i didn't expect that...this was one of the books that i read all the way insatd of reding it have way then putting a review like "the was great keep it up" but this was a masterpiece!

Oh my gosh. To sum it up in one word? WOW. You wrote that so well! The whole room spinning/killing the demon thing was way cool. To think that I thought that my DYB writing was once considered good, haha. You really set the standard much higher, so I'll try and thank you for that later. ;)

Reed working at the hospital was so perfect, lol. It's almost like the whole TEC thing where everyone is everywhere. I LOVE it. I love that whole idea for stories. Especially guilty pleasure (as I would consider this, though you certain don't have to) stories. Just makes them that much more fun to read, you know? Kinda sad that Dale is gone. Dunno what I think about him, but at least he prevented Kale from killing herself. We shall be eternally grateful to him for that. :) (I almost made a frowny face which would have been so wrong.)

The authors note at the end! I was so shocked. You know me too well... or am I just that predictable? Oh well, either way, that was awesome. Lol. Totally threw me off guard. I almost thought I was talking to you for a moment then I remembered I was still reading the chapter/page. I loved it and I feel very special :D And I thank you for spoiling me. Perfect ending to a long week.

I can't wait to read the Epilogue (not prologue as you mistakenly said... *psst*Go fix it now!) but it's really very sad that it's come to an end. At least you've got others I can look forward to reading :D

Good job!

Keira

I can see this was updated ages ago too, stupid fictionpress. Anyways, nice chapter. I like how we got to see more on Dale, I can now say I don't think he's as creepy as I thought he was. Everything makes better sense, now that we know a bit more history on these freaky moster things, I love the irony and odd humour, on how the things were caught a trapped. Reminds me of Ghostbusters, and how they trapped the creeps in that box. Anyways, good job, Pickle. Keep it up!

Bury him with his playboys... oh boy. Lol. Sounds like him, doesn't it? You know, when I made that fool-hardy decision to buy him those one playing cards for Christmas last year, Rock thought I was CRAZY. She told me she would have nothing to do with it. Lol. I figured he needed at least one gift that I knew he would at least like for sure. Didn't know he'd like them all. Anyway, yeah... Where I was going with this? Oh, right, the review.

I can't wait for the next chapter :D I mean, I really liked this one; it explained a lot and showed more of Dale's character, and it also seems like it's going to bridge a very smooth transition from the last chapter to the one coming. It was very well written too. You need to write during class more often... or rather... well... I guess that was bad advice, but it seems to work for you :D

Can't wait for more so type it up fast! Finish your midterm first, but then humor us and put up more!

Keira

Well then! You sure make us sound bullheaded! That was a good chapter, even though it was shorter than your usual stuff. Kane is sure in a bad mood... lol. Like I said before, there's something about Dale I'm getting weird vibes from, but that could be just me. Hahahah, lulaby, eh? I would've liked to see that. Well only if Rylee didn't sing it. Anyways, great job. Keep it up!

Aww man, and there I was thinking I was going to be on some exciting suicide mission... not that I'd ever actually want to die in such a fashion, but you know I would if the situation ever arose. Okay, now I'm kinda creeping myself out. Anyway, GREAT chapter! I really like the background story to the Hunters. Kinda psycho, huh? This next chapter should definitely be interesting. I hope you're still on a roll with the story because I can't wait to see what happens next!

Gah, what an ending! Holy cow, I love this story. Things are falling together so well (the voice, the uncle, the visions, the whole "hunter" premise). I love that Kane is back in the story, he adds a great dimension. You do a fantastic job with all of the little bits of humor here and there ("If by keeping things in check he meant hiding them away behind walls in boxes, then those hunters were doing a bang up job.").

Just the right amount of tension throughout, that creepy-feeling tension that makes you glad you are in a house full of people and one dog who is probably more paranoid about lurking strangers than I am (speaking of, did I tell you our neighbors across the street had their house burglarized last week?). Moving on...

This could be a movie, seriously. Great job. I'm psyched for more. But, um...Rich is going away a few different times in October, so maybe you could wait until November to scare the crap out of me...

;)Liz

Interesting. I loved the interactions between Kale and Kane, lol. But one thing... This chapter wasn't long!! You said you wern't gonna leave it at the short cliffhanger. *raises an eyebrow* The Pam Anderson bit made me smile, typical Kale. Dale's an interesting character, and I can't wait to see more on him, but I got the odd feeling he may not be a good guy, but hey. I'm weird. Can't wait for more. Good work, Pickle!!

Tens... God, you're killing me! How can you possibly live with yourself after a cliffhanger like that? I mean, c'mon -- you're nicer than that... right? All right, so it's very like you to do these things, but it always gets to me.

I like the twist of the Buffy/demon hunter thing. The title FINALLY makes sense to me. Hunter being Tim, his sin being... well, hunting. *Sigh* It makes sense. Yay! Now I don't have that nagging little voice in the back of my head wanting me to ask what detail I missed everytime I see the title.

Go hurry along and write about how you guys are gonna destroy this demon. I've never been much interested in these kind of supernatural things, but you've got me hooked and already reeled in, so please don't torture me for too much longer. Unless of course it means an update on something else, in which case by all means go ahead and work on that... just don't forget about this one too :D

See ya!

Keira

Hahaha, what great chapter. I like how I can break into your house, without anyone caring ;) Though since I apparently do this breaking and entering often, it never occured to anyone to move the knife rack :P!

“Well, that’s easy to deal with. Never go home,” Rylee summed up “You know my mother has offered to adopt you several times.” Hahahaha. Love it.

Can't wait to see how their plan goes. Good job!

Lol, we broke in successfully. I have to admit that part made me laugh. Well, the whole thing -- except the serious parts -- did. And of course I'm trying to imagine Kane in a frozen lake freezing to death and being pulled out by three girls who probably have no clue what they're doing... lol. That was a funny little tidbit to put in there. I can't wait to see what happens next, so hurry up and write it even if you don't like the new computer. At least you HAVE a laptop! Lol.

Sing it lullabies. Great idea, and you're a riot! The breaking and entering scene was great, all of the dialogue and the neighbor getting involved. That whole first section was a great way to give a backed-up view of what was going on.

I loved how you described the room becoming de-energized, that gives such a clear image of the situation. And the meeting was a good way to give a little evaluation of everything that's happened.

Okay, great chapter, now I need to go because 'somebody' is throwing a fit because I won't let her go under the computer desk to play with the electrical cords. Have a great weekend Tens!

Liz