oh yes, I know about this one.

luckily... it wasn't true! =D

wonderful anyways. =]

i loved this poem it means so much to me, my personal expierences also... im sure you didnt give up ur magic... ur magic to see right through me.

-smiles- well i'm a romantic, so naturally i love this. The repetition played out nicely especially when you reach the end, and 'is' becomes 'was' which sends a chill down my spine, very poignant. favourite lines: 'we tried to close up the distance with love calls and fake suicide notes to each other. So true. Keep writing, heart your poems.

The first line just pulls the reader right in. I loved how you described this by the little things, like having hair, slick with sweat being pressed up against the girl's face, and the line on people yelling out curses through their windows. You can really picture a hot humid day where everyone is just annoyed at each other, and a kids who thinks he can run across when the light is still green, and being bumpered to death. I found the 'everyone slammed to a halt' written in italics, very effective. I especially loved the ending about the lady in red running out. Interesting how you chose such a dominant color, kind of reminds me of Superman for some reason, ready to play hero. Smart ending, throughly enjoyable. :)

i love the ending: "she wasthe world

in your eyes."...like she belongs to someone else now? or is just over? i don't really know but this is yet another beautiful piece. its just so crammed up with emotion , it makes me smile just to read it...you really capture the romance so perfectly. another intresting idea to blend the two in together. Well, fantastic collection- im really glad i found it. hope you continue to update.

this is just..so hofficly effective. the start; so calm but almost as if you know something will happen with the attention to details: "I left my hair curly that day and itpressed against my face, sticky from the heat." that para really builds up the dread and antispiation that something bad's gunna happen. and when it does- another genius format: "everything would be fine, just fine, and you leaned forwardjust a little bit. the street seemed like water and you dived in.

cars honked.people yelled.everyone slammed to a halt:" ...just the gap inbetwen almost makes you hold your breath. even if it was only a dream; i know how freaky dreams like this can be, really another great installment.

i love collections like this, theres so much more emotion, meaning and power then some poems could ever have. and this just reeled me in line after line; i love the format, it makes it was intresting to read with the breakups in between and the capitals. the message behind this is just- well almost relatable. how old friendships die over years, god I can see where you're coming from. this is a very moving and strong piece, ive just got to continue now. ps; love your penname, delicous.

i like how you repeat things throughout the poem. it adds an emphesis that's beautiful.

"she was the world in your eyes" is such a powerful last line. beautifulbeautiful in the way it just grabs onto ones heart. lovelylovely.

~* noelle

hi my megan it's me raven, read my stuff sometime. i'll write again but i have to go to dinner.bie

'we tried to close up the distance with love calls and fake suicidenotes to each other, saying we couldn’t live without your love.' i liked that line, along with so many others. i think this one is my favorite out of these three 'she was the world in your eyes' wonderfully written. great after just 'and she is the world' shows how it is.

interesting. this was well written. i liked it. never heard of the game chicken the way you put it. the only game that's called chicken that i know is a hitting-game... but whatever, nice job with this.

so much in this. it's wonderful.

beautiful.beautiful.

~* noelle

just.. beautiful -♥-