yet the rabbit is only hopped up on caffiene... i love your take on things. cheers

I just realized I reviewed 'smooth criminal' under my other name, staticelectric. oops!

First I have to say I love the last line, as well as all the analogies. The only think I can see changing is the double dashes (--), but then that's me, I would have just one (-), but again that's a personal thing. The double dashes seem to break it up even more. Throw the eye a bit. But other than that. brava dahling!

J

so carroll, so perfect. love how you begin, love how the poem works, love how you end. augh, i'm sounding like a broken record. awesome how you combine aesop, cinderella, alice all together.

I love Carrol, this is so authentic, traditional, hallmarked of his style but totally alternative.

LOL I love it! "the clock's hands-- a temperamental demon who never gives you as much as you need." So truew. :P I like the ending, too. Facinating piece, and I adore the authors note. :P Sharpies are amazing. Great work, keep writing!!

loved it. so cute.

~* noelle