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My World Of Fragile Things 2008-05-29 . chapter 1
cute. i like the imagery. nice job.
Emotions Running Deep 2006-02-01 . chapter 1
Wow, good fitting title. If I might comment on your piece here, it is kind rough the way its written. At first you have a pattern of rhyming, then it gets kinda choppy as you contitue. You may want to add some more lines to get it to have a better rhythmic pattern. The words are well expressed overall though.
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