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| Aimee Raven 2006-02-06 ch 1,  | abuseUm...let's see...piece of advice borrowed from Oasis (the rock band): "You could wait for a lifetime to spend your days in the sunshine, you might as well do the white line 'cause when it comes on top, you gotta make it happen!" on the other hand, I really don't approve of drugs, so I think you shouldn't give a flying ** about people and their lives but enjoy yours (or lack thereof). This is good...existential crisis! Stop wasting your time thinking about it, you're never gonna get an answer! (hmm, tell me if I'm being annoying). Love, Mia |
| myno 2006-02-05 ch 1, | abusethey have two daughters.both are alive. what an odd thing to note, another indication of your deep insight and observation and the twisted angle from which you see the world. |
| Chi Ame 2006-02-03 ch 1, | abuseInteresting... there's some parts that I like, some parts I don't. "Bang! my neighbour is renovating his house... both are alive." That stanza was awesome. It made me smile. The rest of it is cool too, but the second to last stanza is... iffy. I think because it may be a little too cliche, and I know that you're too original for that. A little tweaking and rewording and this could be up to par with your other works! |
| a lonely september 2006-02-02 ch 1, | abuseso different. i like it. |