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multiples of six 2006-02-02 . chapter 1
I really like this poem, it's cute.. and I have definitely been in that position. My only criticism is the rhyming of "seductive" and "furtive." It doesn't seem to go, but I guess the last syllable is the same, anyway. Oh well, it's nice, and I like the last couplet especially. =)
just a teardrop 2006-02-02 . chapter 1
'bondage'?! i dont think that goes with the rest of the poem. other than that, worded beautifully. nice job.
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