amazing, gripping imagery. the allusion to hell is very well carried out and i especially liked the line "like cattle." great work! you're going on my favorites!

there's so much beautiful description and imagery in here it's overwhelming. (a cameo from chuck palahniuk? that's interesting!)

*shivers* That was chilling. I love it.

love the dreamscape you create.

lovelove it. fires & airplanes. omigasp.

kait

Great imagery & diction. I felt like I was there- that must have been some dream!

wow... wonderful. you desribed all of this so well.

I like the phrase 'cradled in an explosion' and especially the ending 'falling down from the sky like streetlights shot out.' That's some great imagery. Keep writing