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| Ayakaishi Fei 2006-11-27 ch 1,  | abuseI liked this - not sure why. The first paragraph was a bit too matter of fact, where the rest seemed to flow. I did like it though. I loved the imagery of the angel crying because she could feel, and how greedy she was in her pain. I don't dream in colour, I don't even dream in pictures because I can't visualise stuff - I dream in words and concepts. |
| tomato-greens 2006-03-02 ch 1, | abuseI always dream in color--I just rarely dream in sound or touch. "She was still a creature of God whether she was a creature for God or not." So, so cool, this sentence. I don't know. It's a fable, a fairy tale, and original all at the same time. I very much like it. |
| Ahemait 2006-02-24 ch 1, | abusebeautiful, i loved it. the first sentence (and the summary) was cool. i also liked the ending. i saw an error though: between being and angel and a being a human' being A angel. anyway, very very good. |
| Prisoner-11 2006-02-20 ch 1, | abuseWow. And 80% of people dream in color, the rest is black and white...or the other way around, I can't remember. |
| serialxlain 2006-02-11 ch 1, anon. | abuseIt took me forever to read this because I forgot about it...oops. I love fallen angels and I love this story... I like the paragraph where vanity and materialism comes...and the last sentence is strong and cool too. Love xoxo |
| kyria-asimi 2006-02-05 ch 1, | abuseA lifetime of pain ahead of the angel with the broken spine. I really like this, and now i'm making this proclaimation official with a real review. I dream in color. I can't remember a dream that i've had that wasn't in color... |
| virginia giselle 2006-02-04 ch 1, | abuseInteresting... And this was a dream of yours? Yes, it's weird to dream in color. People can't dream in color unless it's a memory. Which is so weird... because this sounds too fantastic to be a memory. I like it! |
| multiples of six 2006-02-03 ch 1, | abuseI like this =) I like the concept.. and the "tears of ... mingling with tears of ... " was really pretty. And I like the end too. =) |
| Werewolf Nighteyes 2006-02-03 ch 1, | abuseHuh. I don't really know what to say, but it's..whoa. Depressing piece of work here, but it's nice. Keep it up. |