Very funny, I enjoyed reading it. I liked the simplicity, almost as if it was children's picture book. I will definitly get around to reading some of your longer pieces later. Kudos.

this is good, nice message, thanks for reviewing, keep writing

Lol... fun. I enjoyed the seconds it took me to skim/read over this. I'm just confused because I found thi story in the 'just in' section of the site, and it says it was last updated February... Hm...

I liked the story a lot. It was pretty funny and had a realistic charm to it. How could Mr. O' neal have a Banana tree in his back yard? (Unless this was in the Bahamas)

I thought it was really funny. You have a good sense of humor.

haha like i said funny. and somewhat like a fable, i swear. i don't know reminds me of the snail and the rabbit. haha...it has an important moral, which is good. nice story!

Aw that was cute! great job!

I really enjoyed that story. I find it very interesting and I really liked the ending. Cool story... write more

Well, well, haven't seen much new from you lately. I'll have to mention that I have a new way of reviewing--just to make sure you understand that I'm not trying to be mean. I make a list of all critiques, and things I find awkward, and then I leave an overall note at the end. No flaming, I swear.

1) "He was a typical old man; short, balding, wrinkled and hunched over." That semi-colon should be a colon.

2) "He lived in a modest house[,] on a large hill[,] on the far side of the island, with a giant banana tree in his backyard." There should be commas where I placed them in []'s.

3) "'That elephant tries to get anyone any way he can...'" There should be a fourth dot since the ellipsis is at the end of a complete sentence.

4) Like the comment above, at the end, there should be a fourth dot to finish the complete sentence.

Hahah, this is the kind of thing I'd expect to see in a Monty Python film. I can just imagine somebody like John Cleese playing as an old, paranoid man. Good short story.

Tschau,Sam

Shaa! How cute. I really enjoyed this story!

~Puppy~