ooh. Nice job.

*::~Cat~::*

Very abstract and cool. Great piece.

Wow..just wow. I absolutely ADORE the second stanza. It's incredible.

i like the music thing... cool poem

Pure beauty. The last line was stunning.

*floored* The simplicity in your lines is astounding. The last line, "They're just your cinders of Lust" seemed to be the finishing touch on the poem, making it really stand out with its message. You must accept your scars as part of you, instead of trying to claw them off. You'll always have a way to keep things good for yourself.

"And the world danced smooth", a wonderful line. The movement in this work is excellent. It has a stop-speed flow that creates the tone very well. Good write.

The last line is my favorite "They're just the cinders of/ Lust"--Wraps the whole poem up into that one line. VERY nicely done. I can so hear this on the radio by a band like... like... I can't even think, I'm so charged up from this poem. You know, with the right DJ, this could even be some cool techno (but I only like techno when I'm really high and raving, so maybe not). Now I'm gonna be trying to think of a good band that would fit the beat going through my head just now with these words that flow so well. Good job--really caught/hooked me. Keep it up.

I love this. It's so, clever. the words are perfect. beautiful.

I loved the last lines.

Especially: "Life got Distilled"That really got to me. It was so clear...

amazingly written. i liked the last two lines. nice.