Hey! Nice story! i loved it! :)

Wow! You're a great writer...you should really consider a career as an author. I'm really interested to see where you're going with this, and I want to learn more about the story. You had my attention at the very beginning. Great job!

this is the bestest story ever! I love that you can finish a story in just one chapter. A loves it and will now review your other stories.

wow, what a ride! I really admire an author who can develop their characters so much in only one chapter. The manner in which you present the story is very well done, the mood is clear and consistent throughout. It is also beautifully free of errors of a spelling and grammatical nature...which so often plague otherwise amazing works. I would love to read more of your works, please keep posting!