I love this... as every other reviewer has saaid, the poetic style works.

why don't you like it bane? it is awsome extremly poetic. If you gave up on being an author of fiction you could be an author of poetry you are great! :) happiness oh right uh... you like depression to ispire you right? ok I wish you much poetic depretion so you can write more stuff for me to read.

i love it! i envy your talents!

very nice!

Beautiful.